10 Secrets to More Magnetic Copy

by Jason Cohen

image of a magnet

Whether it’s a cover letter for your resume, a sales pitch to a client, a blog post, a Twitter tweet, or an internal business proposal, all of us need to write in a way that draws the reader closer to us.

We need writing that’s compelling, interesting, and unique. We need writing that’s magnetic.

Some think that magnetic writing is all about talent. But a few simple techniques can make any piece of writing more compelling.

Here are ten ways to help you write copy that draws the reader closer:

1. Don’t hedge

“Hedging” is when you go out of your way to cover every contingency in an argument. Example: “Nowadays many middle-school girls have at least some affinity for vampires.” The hedges are “almost all” and “at least some affinity.” These may be strictly true, but it’s soft, pudgy wording that lacks punch. Instead: “Nowadays middle-school girls love vampires.”

2. Repeat a phrase

Repetition establishes structure and rhythm. Repetition taps into the old part of our brain that loves rhyme and meter. Repetition pulls the reader into the flow of your writing. Repetition isn’t difficult to use. Repetition is your friend. Repetition is annoying if overused.

3. No passive voice

Passive voice is when you switch the positions of the subject and object of a sentence. For example: “The boy hit the ball” is in active voice; passive voice is: “The ball is hit by the boy.” Notice how passive voice uses more words without adding information — usually a warning sign of flabby writing.

The wrongness of passive voice isn’t universal, but wouldn’t it have been clearer if I had said that passive voice isn’t always wrong?

4. Brevity!

I don’t care how good your writing is, most people won’t read more than a few sentences. Any more and they’ll start scanning. You probably aren’t reading this article exactly from top to bottom are you? In fact, you’re probably not even reading this sentence. Man, for a discussion about brevity this sure is dragging on. You can fight it by being more entertaining, but the best policy is to just write less.

5. Use short sentences.

Short sentences are easy to read. They’re easy to digest. It’s easier to follow each point of an argument. Sometimes longer sentences — especially if divided up with dashes — are an appropriate tool, especially mixed in with shorter sentences to break things up. If you think short sentences are incompatible with excellent writing, read Stephen King. Or Hemingway. Or Basho.

6. Provoke, don’t solve

If you’re writing a report that is supposed to cover all the bases, this tip doesn’t apply. But if you’re trying to be persuasive (particularly if you’re creating a content net), don’t try to handle every objection in one sitting. Your goal is to get the other person to respond: To ask you about a feature of your product, to challenge your assumptions about a competitor, to double-check something before scheduling an interview. Don’t solve every problem, leaving no stone unturned; leave them wanting more!

7. Eliminate trash adjectives

Most adjectives and adverbs don’t add information; they just take up space and dull your message. Example: “I’m very interested in quickly scheduling an in-person interview.” Remove the adjectives and you get the same message, but sharper: “I’m interested in scheduling an interview.”

8. Be direct

Pardon me, dear reader, but if it wouldn’t be too much of an inconvenience, could I trouble you to do me the favor of applying your obvious considerable facility with the English language to just get to the damn point?

Flowery, respectful and qualified wording is appropriate when you’re asking a waiter to do you a favor without spitting in your food. But it has no place in magnetically persuasive writing.

9. Tell a story

I knew a guy named George who couldn’t figure out why people couldn’t understand the benefits of his software. He had feature and benefit bullet points but they just weren’t sinking in. One day George changed his tactics completely. He wrote up a one-paragraph story about how one of his customers saved $125k by using his software. After that, sales were a lot easier.

10. Write informally

Sure, informal writing isn’t “professional.” And yeah, using phrases like and yeah violates the brevity rule. But it’s usually smart to write like you talk. Being informal helps you come off as a real person, not a stodgy, robotic copy writer.

‘course, it can git to be too durned much, s’don’t go ’round makin’ it hard to just plain understand what in blazes yur talking ’bout.

They say first impressions are most important, and often your written word will be the first impression someone has of you! So take the time and care to make it magnetic.

What tips do you have for more magnetic writing? Share them in the comments and we’ll all improve.

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About the Author: Jason Cohen is the founder of Smart Bear Software. He blogs weekly about marketing, startups, and general geekery at A Smart Bear.

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1 Samantha December 3, 2009 at 9:27 am

Hi guys

I totally appreciate the piece of advices here. It helps a lot, I’m not really a good writer and trying to be one so I am looking for advices. My favorite part in writing is that I usually write informally because I want to share what’s on my mind the easiest way I know.

Kind Regards
Sam
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2 Blogging Guide December 3, 2009 at 9:38 am

Hi all,

Honestly, this is a great list of things to consider when copywriting. Especially learning to use short senteces has helped me out a lot. Basically keeping things simeple, is the key to writing a good copy.

3 Mark December 3, 2009 at 9:44 am

When I write, I try not to think about any of this stuff. I just churn it out.

The editing process is when I try and incorporate some of the great points laid out here.

Thanks.

4 Sean Platt December 3, 2009 at 9:47 am

These are the rules of page turning fiction, which is also magnetic copy; drawing them in close and selling them on turning the page and spending their time. When I first started writing, flowery language was my achilles heal. And while it still has its place, sales copy isn’t it.

5 Henri December 3, 2009 at 9:48 am

I like #8. I hate it when people go on and on without getting to the point. Just tell me what you want damnit. Whole list is awesome and I can’t come up with anything to add to it. How about drinking and having that glass there on… nevermind.

6 Val December 3, 2009 at 9:48 am

You rock! What a great post – clever, entertaining, clear. Love it. Thank you.

7 TwitterFools December 3, 2009 at 9:49 am

Nicely done. Enjoy how you’ve provided examples of your recommendations. Thanks!

8 David Walker December 3, 2009 at 9:49 am

Thanks Jason. I did, and do read every word. I feel if the writer felt the need to write that long, then maybe it ought to be read.
Still, I’m the type to read literature on drugs, graffiti, scribbles and every written word. I’ll ask to be excused on those grounds ;)
I find I have difficulty with the passive voice (years of ‘wrong’ schooling maybe?) and it’s only when I write like I talk that I can overcome it.

After this bit, I see I need to work on short sentences too.

9 Oleg Mokhov December 3, 2009 at 10:00 am

Hey Jason,

I agree with most of your tips here – very useful not just for writing magnetic copy but solid writing for any kind. However, do you think we should ALWAYS follow #1 ‘Don’t Hedge’?

Brian wrote in his Headline series that when we make a sweeping statement, it won’t be convincing because people know it’s not completely true. Instead, he gave a headline example of “Why Some People Almost Always ___.”

By inserting just one word (”almost”) you still keep the statement attention-grabbing and short, but you’re also truthful and convincing. You acknowledge that not every single person is that one thing.

What do you think?

Other than that, thanks for the useful, simple list with a nice dash of humor,
Oleg

10 Jason Cohen December 3, 2009 at 10:03 am

@Oleg: Yes of course every “rule” is really a guideline. You should think about which apply to you, in which circumstances, etc.

In fact, this “caveat” that “no rule of life should be blindly followed” could be tacked onto every blog post! Which is why I left it out. :-D

As another example, there’s the bit about being informal. If you’re trying to persuade the local tax office to not raise your property taxes, it’s best to not be “cute” or informal, right? But for a blog post like this it’s more enjoyable if there’s some levity and human-ness behind it.

So that’s right — a sweeping UNBELIEVABLE statement is unconvincing, I agree. But being forceful and clear is good; you’ll have to find the balance with your own copy.

11 Mike Stenger December 3, 2009 at 10:05 am

It’s amazing how simple little changes in wording and sentences, can make such a huge difference. Now, I’m no pro or expert writer but I do agree with writing informally.

Have some sort of professionalism to what you’re saying but weave in your own personal dialog. People are attracted to personality and rather not an all business, 100% professional piece.

12 Kelly December 3, 2009 at 10:07 am

Great suggestions! Will definitely refer back to these tips in my future writing.

13 Kerrie Flanagan December 3, 2009 at 10:08 am

Great post. I especially like #1. Some writers don’t want to take a stand and their writing sounds wishy-washy.

14 Tomas Stonkus December 3, 2009 at 10:16 am

Dear Jason:

Great tips. I am stugling myself to make my writing more punchy. I know I have been guilty of hedging, solving issues instead of provoking thought, using passive voice and brevity.

Many of these things are very subtle. For example: “How do I know if I am being too lengthy or just using the language the way I speak?” “Am I being to repetitious? ”

I am sure many of them come with practice, but it is great to become aware of them and continuously try to incorporate them into writing blogs.

Thanks for great tips!

Best,
Tomas

15 Jonathan Golden December 3, 2009 at 10:20 am

Writing is something that I have to constantly work on. Thank you for these tips. I will definitely use them daily. Your included examples makes this article very helpful!

16 Maggie Dennison December 3, 2009 at 10:20 am

Hi,
Thanks so much! I’m a copywriter and agree 100% with your points. I really like number 6. It’s the one that my clients the most difficulty with.
Maggie

17 Leslie McLellan December 3, 2009 at 10:25 am

I think you are right on when you say to write like you talk. That plays such a big part in building the “relationship” with your reader. Love it and thanks so much!

18 Roschelle December 3, 2009 at 10:34 am

Great post. I’m the world’s worst when it comes to the “trash adjectives”. I’m the word fluff queen. I keep telling myself LESS REALLY IS MORE :)

19 Charles December 3, 2009 at 10:42 am

I love #6 – Provoke don’t Solve. Add to the PAIN, intensify it and keep selling the PROBLEM. Don’t relieve the pain, but make the pain so big and real that they motivated to take action.

20 Jason Cohen December 3, 2009 at 10:53 am

@Roschelle – A tip there is to allow yourself to write however you feel like it at first, then apply the scissors during editing. That way you get out your natural voice, but still can use an objective eye to get it sharper.

@Charles – Great way of putting it!

21 Momblebee December 3, 2009 at 10:54 am

This is a good list, but not all points apply to all types of writing. I would not write a pitch letter or a press release in the same style or tone I would write a blog post. It’s important to keep the reader and the context of what you are writing in mind to help determine which of these rules should apply.

22 Jennifer Weber December 3, 2009 at 11:00 am

This is a tremendous post and I learned a lot. Thanks.

Since you asked, my advice is as follows:

No matter what you are writing — from a shopping list to a manifesto — DO sweat the details when it comes to spelling and rendering of words, terms, idioms, and colloquialisms.

You look like a dummy if you don’t.

It’s pretty funny when someone doesn’t know (or pretends not to know) the difference between prostate and prostrate (although I don’t have a problem with that one because when getting ready to use either word — which isn’t often — I repeat to myself Dave Barry’s infamous jingle, to wit: “If two ‘r’s’ can be found, it’s down on the ground; if one ‘r’ is at hand, it’s a gland.”).

And I am helped.

But it’s downright aggravating when someone demonstrates in a piece that their grasp of the English language is too weak for them to appreciate the subtle difference between, say, principal and principle or eminent and imminent, to name just a few examples.

Oh, and jam isn’t the same as jamb. One goes on your toast and the other supports your door.

Look it up, for crying out loud. Look. It. Up.

23 Jason Cohen December 3, 2009 at 11:01 am

@Jennifer – Thanks those are great! Completely agree. Incorrect word choice and bad spelling are distracting and senseless.

24 Sonia Simone December 3, 2009 at 11:08 am

@Jennifer, I agree. Taking a little time to “sweat the small stuff” makes a gigantic difference. You may not catch everything (I don’t), but the effort shows.

25 Ian Greenleigh December 3, 2009 at 11:12 am

For the record, I did in fact read this top to bottom (but I don’t always do so).

I am always tempted to hedge. But the first step is admitting I have a problem. I was raised to worship inclusiveness, and it’s a hard mantra to stop chanting.

Informality also rubs me the wrong way on occasion, but the other extreme is far worse. For the record, I would love to see a post written exclusively in Victorian Cockney.

Cheers.

26 Oleg Mokhov December 3, 2009 at 11:14 am

@Jason: Thanks for your reply. I agree with your statement that all rules are just guidelines and shouldn’t be blindly followed. I should have been more specific with my comment – should we follow that guideline while WRITING specifically.

Obviously, there might be certain cases where it’s good to write “every teenage boy loves hip-hop,” but in general, is a better guideline (not rule) to write “almost every teenage boy loves hip-hop?”

Anyway, like you said, we take what we need and adapt it in our own way anyway. I definitely agree that being forceful and clear is good, and that’s what I got from your first guideline.

Thanks again for your concise and useful list (bookmarked), and I hope my nit-picking wasn’t too annoying :)

Best,
Oleg

27 Andrew December 3, 2009 at 11:15 am

This is a damn smart post. Love how you employ the tactics into the point you were making. “Show, don’t tell”. Yeah I got it.

That’s one more tip to add to writing magnetic copy- Be witty.

28 James Deck December 3, 2009 at 11:17 am

Fantastic post, Jason.

Often I retweet a “10 ways” post agreeing with, say, seven or eight of the points.

In this case, I was glued to the article and thoroughly agreed with each point.

29 Shane Arthur December 3, 2009 at 11:20 am

Good write and welcome Jason.

My tip: Partner with an editor that eats magnets. ;)

“““““““““““““““““`

We need writing that’s compelling, interesting, and unique. We need writing that’s magnetic.
We need compelling, interesting, and unique writing. We need magnetic writing.

Some think that magnetic writing is all about talent. But a few simple techniques can make any piece of writing more compelling.

Here are ten ways to help you write copy that draws the reader closer:
Draw readers closer in 10 ways:

“Hedging” is when you go out of your way to cover every contingency in an argument.
“Hedging” is going out of your way to cover every contingency in an argument.

Repetition isn’t difficult to use.
Repetition isn’t hard.

Passive voice is when you switch the positions of the subject and object of a sentence.
Switching the positions of the subject and object of a sentence creates passive voice.

The wrongness of passive voice isn’t universal, but wouldn’t it have been clearer if I had said that passive voice isn’t always wrong?

Any more and they’ll start scanning.
Any more and they’ll scan.

You probably aren’t reading this article exactly from top to bottom are you?

You can fight it by being more entertaining, but the best policy is to just write less.
Entertaining writing fights it, but writing less is the best policy.

Short sentences are easy to read. They’re easy to digest. It’s easier to follow each point of an argument.
Short sentences read easy. They’re digestible, making each point of an argument easy to follow.

If you think short sentences are incompatible with excellent writing, read Stephen King
If you think short sentences and excellent writing don’t mix, read Stephen King

If you’re writing a report that is supposed to cover all the bases, this tip doesn’t apply.
If your report must cover all bases, ignore this tip.

But if you’re trying to be persuasive (particularly if you’re creating a content net), don’t try to handle every objection in one sitting.
But if you’re trying to persuade (particularly if creating a content net), don’t tackle every objection in one sitting.

Your goal is to get the other person to respond:
Getting the other person to respond is your goal.

After that, sales were a lot easier.
After that, sales soared.

robotic copy writer.
robotic copywriter

They say first impressions are most important, and often your written word will be the first impression someone has of you!
They say first impressions are most important, and often the first impression someone has of you is your writing.

30 Alan Fairweather The Motivation Doctor December 3, 2009 at 11:23 am

Great; thank you, very helpful!

31 Carla December 3, 2009 at 11:24 am

Great advice, as usual! Thanks!

I get more clicks when I add something personal to a blog post. When I post a recipe I get a better response by adding what my guests usually say about it. Just providing informaiton is not enough. I am learning that you must engage your reader!

32 Mark December 3, 2009 at 11:27 am

Ahh… Hedging is so commonplace today. I think that comes from our desires to always be right (or at least look like real authorities on the subject).

Great list Jason!

Btw – for more great tips on writing check out On Writing by Stephen King. Entertaining & insightful.

33 Jason Cohen December 3, 2009 at 11:30 am

@Ian – Awesome point about Cockney. Brings up the fact that some of this differs by culture in ways that we don’t always consider. Typical American fault as well, no?

However, that does reinforce the point about “short and clear” — makes it easiest for non-native speakers to grok the talk. :-)

@Shane – Hah, awesome! :-)

I think what you’re really proving here is that copy is never perfect, and that more eyeballs (to a point) are better.

Of course eventually you have “to just f’ing ship it…” :-)

34 Joven December 3, 2009 at 11:31 am

Great tips! I always believe in the power of a few words to persuade ’stubborn’ readers. Brevity should always be considered so readers won’t end up snoring while reading your piece…

35 Sonia Simone December 3, 2009 at 11:36 am

Laughing, Jason. Just so.

Shane has a very special gift. :) I’m a pretty good editor, but I don’t see everything he sees.

36 Coach Donnelly December 3, 2009 at 11:38 am

Or, how about summing up all this advice by simply remebering:

“DON’T WRITE COPY LIKE A POLITICIAN!”

:)

37 Derek Alvarez December 3, 2009 at 11:42 am

Great advice, Jason! Practice also helps and I also get a lot of ideas by reading good copywriters’ work — like this blog, Mike Dillard’s stuff, Perry Marshall, etc.

38 Shane Arthur December 3, 2009 at 11:55 am

@Jason, magnitized eyes are better than many eyes. Did I mention I eat magnets? ;)

@Sonia, Stop it! I’m blushing magnet-red right now. :0

39 anton kozlik December 3, 2009 at 12:16 pm

@Shane: I believed writers didn’t read this blog — and then you did what had to be done. Nice job!

40 Shane Arthur December 3, 2009 at 12:28 pm

@anton, I’m no writer. I’m a compulsive proofer with an unmatched inability to keep it to myself.

ps. Jason, I just read your “Rich vs. King” post. Great story and great write. I highly recommend the Copyblogger Tribe read it. If everyone here follows copyblogger advice and becomes successful, they will have to make the same tough decision you made (the right one in my opinion): http://blog.asmartbear.com/rich-vs-king-sold-company.html

41 marsala December 3, 2009 at 12:41 pm

Great advice, short sweet and to the point!

42 Glendon Cameron December 3, 2009 at 1:14 pm

I like this advice. Gain quite a bit of things to put into my blog post today. I think I will tell a story!

G

43 Ian Greenleigh December 3, 2009 at 1:20 pm

@Shane-

Your lean, mean magnetism just got you an interested twitter follower and blog reader. So, there’s that…

Don’t know what I’m trying to prove, actually. I wonder how you feel about outlining comments before writing? JK JK JK – that would be LAME.

44 Kristina Halvorson December 3, 2009 at 1:22 pm

Jason, this is one of the best posts I’ve read on Copyblogger. Entertaining, insightful, and articulate. While your tips can be applied in any medium, they’re especially pertinent when writing for online media, which is where I focus.

Well-done.

45 Abbi December 3, 2009 at 1:34 pm

Here’s another one – or an extension of #9…

Be concrete. If you need to include numbers to tell your story try creating a visual image rather than siting data. This works especially well if the image is local to your audience.

Last year ______ served enough people to fill Lincoln’s Pershing Auditorium – twice!

Rather than: Last year _____ served 15,000 people.

46 Gabe | freebloghelp.com December 3, 2009 at 2:20 pm

“The blogger left a comment.” I like it!

Seriously though, the amount of word lard that I read daily is sickening. Hopefully some folks learn a few lessons from this post.

47 Robert Bravery December 3, 2009 at 2:41 pm

Nice post, and by the way I did read the whole thing. But must confess that I do do a lot of scanning. Especially on a blog that has small fonts.

English is my first language even though I often make buge grammar mistakes. Probably due to the fact that I am dyslexic. No excuse, just makes it harder for me as well as taking longer to get it right.

You points really got to the heart because at times I have been guilty of all.

48 Brent Logan December 3, 2009 at 3:32 pm

I find I do my best writing when I read the post aloud before pressing “publish.”

49 Samir Balwani December 3, 2009 at 3:33 pm

I think No Passive Voice and Tell A Story are the most important. Especially when it comes to social media, telling a story makes it easier to spread too. People relate better to stories.

50 Dale Berkebile December 3, 2009 at 4:09 pm

Thanks so much for the excellent article. Boy you bring up some really great points here. I not only learned a few things, but you also re-enforced some of the habits we already use. I will be sure to pass this on to our friends and clients.

Keep up the good work!

51 Helen Kidd December 3, 2009 at 4:10 pm

Found myself agreeing with every point while at the same time finding it sad that we, as a society, have gone from taking the time to read the likes of “War and Peace” and “Gone with the Wind” to skimming blogs and tweets of 140 characters. Best advice I ever had was “Write a lot. Read even more” (Jerry Jenkins).

52 Eric December 3, 2009 at 4:25 pm

I think we’d all do well to take some of these tips, but there’s certainly a little bias in favor of the author’s style here. As a copywriter quick, witty, and pointed is the standard, but some of my favorite blogs use a much more creative and less pragmatic approach. I can’t say I love wordiness, but frankly, I look for quality writing and content over the brief blogger online-media-maniac pretentious jargon.

53 Charlie Moger, Wizard of Ads December 3, 2009 at 4:25 pm

Copy that isn’t compelling is noise and gets tuned out. Short sentences. Brevity of wit. Boost the verbs. Great post. Because less is more, I’ll leave it there.

54 Scott Sheaffer December 3, 2009 at 5:55 pm

Oh doctor heal thyself. “He wrote up a one-paragraph story…” How about, “He wrote a one-paragraph story…” I’ll forgive you this time.

55 Annabel Candy December 3, 2009 at 6:09 pm

I’d say use language that resonates with your readers. If they’re teenaged Twilight fans the language that will appeal to them will be quite different from the wording that a bunch of stuffy judges would appreciate:)

56 Derek Alvarez December 3, 2009 at 6:42 pm

@Helen, I decided to read “War and Peace” a few years ago and it took quite a bit of dedication and discipline to set aside enough time to finish it. It was worth it, though!

The most common excuse I hear people give for not reading is that they are too busy or there is not enough time in the day. But it’s funny because, like you said, how many people spend their spare time reading Twitter posts and watching Youtube videos?

57 Matt December 3, 2009 at 6:43 pm

Leaving a comment is what I almost always do, but I kind of feel a little like I might sort of drag it on and would most likely break too many of the hard and fast rules of brevity and other things.

Actually… this was a fantastic post!

58 Andrew @ WeBuildYourBlog.com December 3, 2009 at 7:23 pm

I always focus on my readers when writing a blog post because they are my customers. They will converse with you and they will be the ones buying from you. So your writing must be focused on them.

59 Amanda Gonzalez December 3, 2009 at 7:35 pm

A good rule of thumb is to write to an eighth grader. This DOES NOT mean being simplistic – it means if there’s a more common word to explain your point, use it. Don’t use big words for the sake of it, or to show off your vocabulary.

60 Sarge | BeginnerBlogger.com December 3, 2009 at 9:37 pm

I think people ‘hedge’ sometimes because they don’t want to get in trouble stating something that may not be entirely true. More so the case now with the new FTC rulings in place you can’t get away with stating something so ‘punchy’ unless it’s true.

It may not apply to just standard blog posts (does it or not?) since blog posts don’t usually ’sell’ anything, so I may be wrong.

Sarge | BeginnerBlogger.com

61 the_IRF December 3, 2009 at 9:48 pm

Thanks. Great way to explain. You have shown by doing.

62 Jason Cohen December 3, 2009 at 10:56 pm

@Sarge – IANAL, but you can write whatever you want as long as it’s not slander.

You’re referring to the new law that if you get compensated for reviewing a product you have to disclose that. Nothing to do with WHAT you say about it, or how.

If it’s actually an advertisement you’re writing, there’s laws (in America) about what you can say, but clearly that’s not what the guidelines above are referring to.

63 Sarge | BeginnerBlogger.com December 3, 2009 at 11:13 pm

@Jason that’s cool. I figure for blog posts you can write whatever you want pretty much.

I’ll admit I haven’t read through the FTC rules myself – just what others have blogged about it. From what I picked up you can’t say things like ‘you will lose 20 pounds in 20 days’. I’m sure it only applies to things you’re actually selling but I could be wrong.

Just wanted to point that out. :)

64 Jamie Favreau December 4, 2009 at 12:46 am

Great tips as always!!

65 Dan Bossenbroek December 4, 2009 at 1:01 am

Great article, again. Thanks for the tips.

66 Fan Bi December 4, 2009 at 1:57 am

thanks for this great post jason, and yes did read every word. on the company blog (www.blank-label.com) personally do find myself repeating for emphasis, which comes at the cost of brevity. also i like to be direct but find myself not doing it because i want to tell a story which has interesting twists and turns. so it turns out that maybe you do have to hedge a little and balance between all the factors …

67 healthy source December 4, 2009 at 3:18 am

I often read interesting articles, success stories, a variety of success, but few who tells it how to succeed, how to achieve such success. generally recommend a tool or goods at a specified price. just a story, without being able to take advantage for the reader. thank you for you who have shared

68 Rachel Henke December 4, 2009 at 4:18 am

Hi Jason
I enjoyed your post very much. I have found that asking questions works well and involves the reader.

69 JimmyKellyart December 4, 2009 at 6:32 am

Hi Jason,
Good tips, I really like the one about telling a story; everyone loves a story. The best stories are our own personal ones. The only problem is when we tell them it can leave us vulnerable to being ignored and considered just uninteresting. But its a risk we all have to take.
Thanks again, Jimmy

70 Karl December 4, 2009 at 8:00 am

I think I’m guilty of ‘hedging’ but it is certainly something I’m working on!

71 Michael Adams December 4, 2009 at 9:19 am

Great list. Thanks.
I would just highlight the importance of rhythm and visuals. Magnetic music has long, medium and short notes. So does speech. Use short sentences, but add some funk. While adding your baseline, use visual notes.
If they feel and see, they’ll buy.
Thanks, Michael

72 Joshua Black December 4, 2009 at 9:48 am

Spot on with number 9. I will use number 4 with a side of number 10 to write this comment.

Tell a story. People remeber stories. Just look at the last time you heard an urban legend that you thought was true (and remember it from 10 years ago).

…now try to remember the benefit bullets in the cell phone ad you heard 5 minutes ago.

Exactly my point.

73 David Reske December 4, 2009 at 10:03 am

Attention to writing is too often neglected in marketing. This is a great resource for staying on target and keeping skills sharp.

74 Ina December 4, 2009 at 10:29 am

Hi Jason,

I like the clever way in which you wrote the whole piece :)
Regarding #5 -use short sentences – I’d say to mix short and longer sentences, make them dance. Too many of those short sentences can make a text sound telegraphic.

As of hedging, there are certain constructions that ask for this kind of afraid-to-say-what-I-want-to-say writing. In a sentence like “Nowadays many middle-school girls have at least some affinity for vampires.” it’s the “nowadays” that asks for the hedge. My take on this would be that instead of trying to generalize we should “settel” for an observation – we’re not publishing a study, we’re writing about stuff we believe in.

Nice to read your here too:)
Ina

75 Ms. Freeman December 4, 2009 at 11:50 am

LOL #4

I am always on the look out for ways to become a better writer, and I find I am guilty of several of these key points. Number 4 was very funny. I need to work on short sentence writing.

76 Jillian Kuhn December 4, 2009 at 5:13 pm

Jason, nice post. Easy to follow, well articulated, and smart ways to improve your copy. I’ve been trying to explain the benefits of shorter, more to-the-point copy on my blog, and a few items on your list are great tools to help achieve that.

77 Tim December 5, 2009 at 12:48 am

Okay so a friend of mine who is an english professor offered to copy edit my wine blog. I dont even know what that means. I told him I have spell check. and Item #10 on this list sums it up. Time for a #buzzcation

78 Pamala Knight December 6, 2009 at 10:14 pm

GOD, I love this blog.

79 Kevin Day December 8, 2009 at 11:23 am

Great list and a great reminder of the fundamentals. Thanks for the flashbacks of Mrs. Boldman, my whip-cracking ninth-grade English teacher. She scared the crap out of me, but just thinking about her makes me a better writer.

80 Ryan December 8, 2009 at 3:21 pm

Be real. Write from the heart. Don’t write to your audience. Write for them. This encourages dialog.

81 Ekber December 8, 2009 at 5:35 pm

l like this article, well done very good, always be more magnetic

82 Jenny Pilley December 9, 2009 at 3:35 am

Posts like this always catch my attention because they remind me of what my writing may be missing. It’s so important to find the balance in writing well but being informative, writing for an audience without being too chatty.

I think you balance your points well but I have to disagree… I read all of it, no scanning :)

83 James Frey December 9, 2009 at 7:00 pm

I write things out, just get the words out of my head and spilling out on to the screen. Then I go back a edit — hack and slash and take out about 90 percent of the garbage.

84 Eric December 14, 2009 at 5:05 pm

great article. i think the point about brevity should carry more weight, but i definitely agree with everything that was said. this article will help me rethink my writing. thanks!

85 Dr. Elon Bomani December 20, 2009 at 1:49 pm

I know that having good copy writing is very important and I am so glad for the information you shared. I must do the best copy in the world for 2010 to help my online biz succeed.

86 Sell number plate December 21, 2009 at 6:35 pm

Very informative post, I feel I am doing far too much of the features and benefit bulletpoints you mention in number 9 and not enough story telling. Definately something to consider!

87 Ankara Parke December 24, 2009 at 3:25 am

Be real. Write from the heart. Don’t write to your audience. Write for them. This encourages dialog.

88 Samantha Y December 27, 2009 at 6:20 pm

Great Post. I’m just starting my blog and stumbled across yours on Twitter. I have a short attention span but have been trying to write how I thought everyone else would like to read a post. You have greatly relieved my mind. I’ll write like I think and talk.

89 Marshall Wayne December 29, 2009 at 6:19 am

I like the “Don’t Hedge” idea. I feel turned off when I read someone who is hedging (I almost wrote, “I sometimes feel just a little bit turned off….then realized I was blatantly hedging).

You bet.

90 listformula December 29, 2009 at 11:49 am

This is what’s up! I love and appreciate no nonsense people like you guys ! Even though I have been using some of these tactics in my own copy it’s always nice to see people on my page.

91 David Lorell December 30, 2009 at 10:15 am

“Repetition is annoying if overused”… very funny! Obviously, injecting humor is a real pull… it hooked me from that moment on.

92 Roy Petitfils December 30, 2009 at 11:46 pm

Great post. Bulleted content, as in this post is magnetic.

93 Pallav January 15, 2010 at 10:20 am

Avoiding fluff is the key.

94 Adria January 18, 2010 at 10:35 pm

What do you think about admissions of fault? Its usage definitely requires care (it wouldn’t quite be appropriate in the middle of trying to prove you are right), but it can help connect you to the reader. Used at the right times, making readers privy to your imperfections gives the impression that you are honest, helps the reader relate to you (because they aren’t perfect either), and makes you seem less pretentious. Have you ever done this? Has it worked for you?

95 Maria January 22, 2010 at 1:23 pm

Thank you for this article, super easy to read. I read the whole thing without scanning, so unlike me. :)

96 mk akan January 24, 2010 at 5:15 am

full of tips and straight to the point..l love telling stories it connects people emotionally

97 Pat Sutton January 26, 2010 at 8:01 am

Great article, I have retweeted. You asked for any further tips – I was once told that a good test is to pretend to hold a phone to your ear and read it out loud as if you’re talking to someone – if it feels laboured and not natural then it’s not right. Try it, it does work!

98 ~Melody @ 6 Feet Over~ January 26, 2010 at 1:29 pm

#4 is cracking me up! …and yes, I did scan a little bit.

Wonderful advice. I’ve always viewed my writing style as ‘brain farts with a voice.’ Trying to become more of a writer. I’m feeling pressure because I’m actually getting readers and comments and emails…what have I done? lol

Thanks for the tips!

~melody~

99 Alexkazam January 27, 2010 at 1:15 pm

Excellent advice- it’s so easy to slip into bland and flabby writing style when a taught and challenging writing can spring the copy to life. I particularly like the story idea- adding personal interest, which is why it’s good to have a comprehensive profile.

100 Bart January 28, 2010 at 3:40 pm

Wow. This is a superb resource. Bookmarked! What I always like about the posts on copyblogger is the humor in it. It cracks me up ;-) .

101 Rod January 30, 2010 at 1:54 pm

I talk like you did in the last point. Maybe that should be edited ;)

Y’all add so much to these here internets. Thanks a bunch n’ keep on a truckin’. Y’all are the bestest.!

Translation: You guys add lots of value. Thank you. You are great

Rod

102 zuri February 1, 2010 at 7:42 pm

Hi Jason,

Thanks for the advice,I’ve been looking for some tips on how to improve my writing skills, and this one will surely help.I just realized that writing is not that hard as what I’ve thought before.

103 Helena February 2, 2010 at 10:07 am

I concur with the other comments. I was scanning the article until point 4, after that I went back and read it end to end. I am always looking on ways to improve my writing skills. This 10 point guide will really help with that – succinct and entertaining. Thank you.

104 Helen Keevy February 10, 2010 at 9:11 am

I think you got the best advice up there first – Don’t Hedge. That is one I know I’m guilty of… comes from working in the public sector and hard to shake off. Will try to keep it top of my list too. Thanks

105 The Story Woman February 10, 2010 at 10:09 am

Thanks for the reminder about these ideas that I do know, but forget apply. Deleting “more” from you title would be following your own lead, and is stronger.

106 Paul February 10, 2010 at 10:37 am

A great reminder that “less is more” when it comes to writing…and a lot of other things in life

107 elizabeth! February 10, 2010 at 2:31 pm

Ah… brevity.

108 Janet Raines February 11, 2010 at 9:51 am

Good advise! Seems as if the journalists that have written for printed media are the ones that have difficulty in keeping online writing short and to the point.

109 Mohammed Al-Taee February 14, 2010 at 4:00 am

Thanks for the reminder!

110 Kmarch February 15, 2010 at 11:58 pm

Another key to magnetic copy is the use of specifics. The more specific you can be (especially including specific numbers), the more alive, believable, and memorable your writing becomes. What if McDonald’s had launched the Big Mac by saying, “it’s some beef patties with a bunch of other stuff on a bun”? Instead, we still remember their ultra-specific “2 all beef patties, special sauce, lettuce, cheese, pickles, onions on a sesame-seed bun” word-for-word some (ahem) 20+ years later . . .

111 Sandra February 16, 2010 at 3:39 pm

Nice.
Brevity – good reminder.
Repitition – will try it.
Provoke – will think about that one too.

112 search engine optimization pricing March 4, 2010 at 3:41 pm

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113 Dom A / SevenFigureBlueprints.com March 8, 2010 at 7:09 am

Another great post by you guys – I am loving your site. It’s well written and really informative, perfect for startup beginners and those with experience that are looking to improve their marketing techniques through the power of writing.

Thanks again.

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