Let’s Remix a Few More of Your Headlines

by Brian Clark

Last fall, I invited readers to submit posts they had written, and I chose several and rewrote the titles. Quite a few people seemed to get a lot out of that process, so rather than writing yet another article about headlines, I thought we should do it again.

Here’s how it works:

Simply drop the URL of the post or article you want considered in the comment section. I will pick several from the submissions, rewrite the headlines in an upcoming post, and provide explanations for the changes I make.

Cool?

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1 annette March 7, 2007 at 5:39 pm
2 Edward Mills March 7, 2007 at 5:46 pm

Hi Brian

This one might be a bit of a stretch, an inspirational, world-changing, sort of a post. See what you think.

http://evolvingtimes.com/2007/03/the-breeze-at-dawn-has-secrets-to-tell-us.htm

3 David Airey March 7, 2007 at 5:54 pm
4 Mat March 7, 2007 at 5:55 pm

Hi Brian

http://matnewton.wordpress.com/2007/03/06/every-customer-is-a-potential-competitor/

This is a fantastic way to show us practically what you’re talking about.. nice.

5 Anthony Baggett March 7, 2007 at 5:56 pm
6 noah kagan March 7, 2007 at 6:00 pm

Would love your opinion on improving: http://okdork.com/2007/03/07/the-web-next-revolution/

thanks!
noah

7 Glen March 7, 2007 at 6:00 pm

Great idea, will be interesting to see the results

8 Jon Symons March 7, 2007 at 6:04 pm

Great to see you return to this idea as it was a very good learning exercise last time out.
I felt this one could have been magic but alas, 0 Diggs :)
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Thanks.

9 Brett March 7, 2007 at 6:07 pm
10 Ginger March 7, 2007 at 6:22 pm

I would like your opinion…thanks for the help!
http://www.signaturestagingandredesign.com/blog/?p=7

11 Mark McGuinness March 7, 2007 at 6:28 pm

Glad the ‘title clinic’ is open again – here’s a patient from this afternoon: http://www.wishfulthinking.co.uk/blog/2007/03/07/how-do-you-balance-art-and-commerce/

12 Real Women Scrap March 7, 2007 at 6:30 pm

Your titles are always so attention grabbing…I’d love to see how you changed mine. Here’s a link to
TV for Busy Women…Real Women Scrap TV.

13 Andrew Flusche March 7, 2007 at 6:35 pm

This is an awesome idea. I’m looking forward to the results.

The Best IM Client for Any Network
http://www.legalandrew.com/2007/03/05/the-best-im-client-for-any-network/

14 Jamie Hill March 7, 2007 at 6:40 pm
15 ianmack March 7, 2007 at 6:44 pm
16 Small Ventures March 7, 2007 at 6:47 pm

Here is my attempt at what I think was a good post title.

http://www.mysmallventures.com/i-now-have-over-three-million-user-accounts/

I would be interested to see how you would recommend making it better.

I’m also interested in ideas that will help you create a eye catching titles that stay on topic so that the url get indexed well by search engines, without the “Top 10″, or “Ultimate Guide To..” just appended to the title. I’m talking for simple posts like this one.

http://www.mysmallventures.com/ruby-on-rails-rmagick-linux-issues/

That is two links, but hey I asked some questions. Looking forward to the post.

Cheers

17 Kat March 7, 2007 at 6:49 pm
18 Brian Laks March 7, 2007 at 7:03 pm

One of my pages is about future batteries. The headline is:

Nanobatteries – The Next Generation of Portable Power

Let me know what you think. Thanks!

http://www.brianlaks.com/nanobatteries.htm

19 Kevin March 7, 2007 at 7:05 pm
20 giovanna March 7, 2007 at 7:06 pm

thank you so much for this opportunity. i love what you did for aaron wall’s website.

21 giovanna March 7, 2007 at 7:06 pm
22 James Boone Dryden March 7, 2007 at 7:18 pm

Excellent idea. I just started my blog, so the more advice I can get the better.

http://jbdrydenco.blogspot.com

23 Jim Gibbon March 7, 2007 at 7:21 pm

I saw this last time you did it and thought it was great! Ironically, it was procrastination that kept me from submitting this: http://jimgibbon.com/2006/08/05/one-simple-technique-to-help-you-overcome-procrastination-and-start-writing-now/

24 David Childress March 7, 2007 at 7:43 pm

Your choice, any headline on the front page…

25 Joachim Klehe March 7, 2007 at 7:49 pm
26 John March 7, 2007 at 7:54 pm

Cool idea, thanks Brian. Hope this link works right:

How To Make Readers Avoid Your Blog Like The Plague

27 Jim Kukral March 7, 2007 at 8:03 pm

http://www.jimkukral.com/?p=161

I can always use some help from the copyblogger!

28 Doug March 7, 2007 at 8:06 pm
29 Gord Davis March 7, 2007 at 8:07 pm

Even if I don’t make the round of headlines, I’ll look forward to seeing your changes.

Here are a couple of my articles:

http://www.davisdesigns.ca/elibrary_a-great-blog.asp

http://www.davisdesigns.ca/elibrary_colors.asp

30 Martial Development March 7, 2007 at 8:10 pm
31 webduck March 7, 2007 at 8:19 pm

I was one of the “chosen ones” that Brian helped last fall. This was my post …
THIS IDAHO SCHOOL NEEDS YOUR HELP! PLEASE READ THIS POST! Brian’s rewrite was more appealing, by far with the message being about not leaving these kids behind. It even generated a challenge for matching funds, but I don’t think that ever took off. Too bad. :(

32 Flo March 7, 2007 at 8:32 pm

Thanks for all the input on good copywriting, Brian! :)

Here’s my submission:
Discovering Music that You Like

33 Chris March 7, 2007 at 8:36 pm

http://www.chrisperruna.com/2005/08/11/trade-for-real/

An old article I am looking to update and revive! Thanks!

34 Alpesh Nakar March 7, 2007 at 8:37 pm
35 Martin Lindsey March 7, 2007 at 8:38 pm

Here’s one I posted today. Are we limited to just one?

http://martyblogs.blogspot.com/2007/03/my-fellow-notaries-are-blogging-for.html

36 mincus March 7, 2007 at 8:39 pm
37 Josh March 7, 2007 at 8:48 pm

I think the title I chose was pretty good but would like to get your suggestions!

http://dollarsforsense.blogspot.com/2007/02/save-world-one-lightbulb-at-time.html

38 Maki March 7, 2007 at 8:54 pm

I have one! It feels a little long to me but I can’t think of a good way to shorten it while still conveying the essence of the post.

A Comprehensive Guide to StumbleUpon: How to Build Massive Traffic to Your Website and Monetize it.

Thanks, Brian :)

39 Jon Miller March 7, 2007 at 9:20 pm

Good article seeks better headline. Likes: Compelling imagery, strong calls to action. Dislikes: Passive voice, split infinitives.

Optimize for B2B Search Marketing – Part 2

40 David Stern March 7, 2007 at 9:25 pm

Fantastic! I learned a lot from the first go round. My submission to the lottery:

http://www.financialthink.com/2007/03/06/march-almanac-the-16-solution/

41 Joe March 7, 2007 at 9:39 pm

I’ve started using some of your tips, it’s hard but when it works, it’s great!
http://itsvista.com/2007/02/microsoft-says-it-wont-stop-vista-upgrade-thieves/

42 Wendy Piersall :: eMom March 7, 2007 at 9:49 pm

HARGH! I was going to ask for your help today on a headline, then figured I shouldn’t bother you with it. What timing! :)

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43 Mitchell Harper March 7, 2007 at 10:08 pm

Sounds good Brian. Here’s my link:
http://www.interspire.com/webedit/

44 lawton chiles March 7, 2007 at 10:10 pm
45 Lita March 7, 2007 at 10:49 pm

After reading your posts only from my feedreader, now I decide to involve myself.
Here’s my link: Behave well in medical service. It’s an old post, but it still needs a title rewrite.
Thanks, Brian.

46 Lita March 7, 2007 at 10:51 pm

Oh, pardon the previous wrong URL :(
The article’s URL is fine, though.

47 Chris March 7, 2007 at 10:52 pm

current title: The Breathtaking Designs of Thomas Heatherwick
http://tropist.wordpress.com/2007/03/07/the-breathtaking-designs-of-thomas-heatherwick/

48 sinha March 7, 2007 at 11:29 pm

Will look fwd to your suggestion:

Give your Windows machine the Mac look and feel

49 Wil Reynolds March 7, 2007 at 11:32 pm
50 Jessica Duquette March 7, 2007 at 11:45 pm

thanks so much, Brian, for doing what you do!

My post:

http://www.its-not-about-your-stuff.com/2007/02/the_why_of_clut.html

the title for this post is: the WHY of clutter

51 Alan Alston March 8, 2007 at 12:02 am

I might be a little to late to join this fray, but here goes:

“Remix. Then roll with it.”
http://dynamo.co.za/journal/2006/12/20/remix_then_roll_with_it/

“It’s all about jump-starting…”
http://dynamo.co.za/journal/2007/01/12/its_all_about_jump-starting/

Thanks for this opportunity!

52 Shamelle March 8, 2007 at 12:21 am

Hi Brain,
I started blogging about 5 months ago.
I have learnt a lot from your valuable advice. I have done my best to incorperate that advice into the posts I write.
I will admit that there is more room for improvement. If possible please give me some feed back.

http://enhancelifethinktank.blogspot.com/2007/02/why-do-smart-people-do-stupid-things.html

Thank you
Shamelle

53 Brad Fults March 8, 2007 at 12:32 am
54 Rachel Whalley March 8, 2007 at 1:18 am

I’d be honored to get your feedback. I had to go back to December to find a post I wrote before reading your posts about how to write better headlines.
http://writewithmeaning.com/?p=25

55 Rory March 8, 2007 at 1:42 am

This is an intriguing challenge, Brian. It will be very interesting to see your work “in action”, as it were. It should be a real education.

I would be interested in an alternative title to this short story of a father’s afternoon walk with his daughter:

Being Taught Appreciation

56 Prem Sagar March 8, 2007 at 3:33 am

hi,
I would be thrilled to see your comments on it. Here is the link

http://premsagark.blogspot.com/2007/03/if-i-had-wings.html

57 Alexander Becker March 8, 2007 at 4:17 am

Brian, here’s to you –
http://wow.alexanderbecker.net/blog/2007/02/state-of-flow-and-becoming-addicted-to.php
currently known by the name –
“The State of Flow and Becoming Addicted to Action”

Please have fun.
Thanks, Alex

58 Mitch March 8, 2007 at 4:30 am
59 jozzua March 8, 2007 at 5:27 am
60 John Metcalfe March 8, 2007 at 5:43 am

Hi Brian,

Would love your opinion on improving the following article headline. Current headline to the article is “Internet Business Blog Drug Addicts – Shocking Statistics!”

Here’s the link the the above article:
http://www.dkwebmaster.com/my-ramblings/internet-business-blog-drug-addicts.php

61 paul peterson March 8, 2007 at 6:17 am

“I’m fed up with the “… Church!”

Thanks for your consideration!

http://paulpeterson.wordpress.com/2007/03/07/im-fed-up-with-the-church/

62 Alex March 8, 2007 at 6:51 am
63 James Davis March 8, 2007 at 7:02 am

I’d be grateful if you could take a look at the title of this article I wrote.

http://www.freecharity.org.uk/2007/02/13/how-to-build-your-helpdesk-using-request-tracker/

64 Beth Cole March 8, 2007 at 7:26 am

Hey Brian, if you’re still reading, here’s my submission. Thanks for doing this. This post has gotten the most traffic for my blog in spite of the title :) .

http://webservant.proimpact.com/2006/03/

65 Ciaran March 8, 2007 at 7:32 am
66 Graham March 8, 2007 at 7:33 am

I’ve been using many of your headline techniques on my blog recently, but I was stumped on this post for some reason:

http://www.goclipless.com/2007/03/womens_specific.html

I’ve used your techniques well in other cases, here’s one I particularly like:

http://www.goclipless.com/2007/02/base_jump_mtb.html

Anyway, thanks for your help!

67 Manoj Sharma March 8, 2007 at 7:34 am

Hi!

Am writing a book on Professional Coaching and would love you assistance with the book title down the line.

In the mean time, here is the url for the post from The Manoj Sharma Blog ( http://differworld.blogspot.com )

http://differworld.blogspot.com/2007/03/4-great-leadership-ideas-for-you-to.html

And great work!

68 Adrian March 8, 2007 at 7:42 am

Hi Brian,

I’d like to submit this post:
http://do.palicio.us/blog/2007/03/08/thoughts-from-the-psfk-conference/

Thank you!

69 levee March 8, 2007 at 8:03 am

I wrote this one earlier this week – think my headline’s particularly good. I’d be interested to hear what you think!

http://www.theleveebreaks.co.uk/2007/03/06/are-you-an-easyjet-speedy-boarding-tosser/

70 bdthomas March 8, 2007 at 8:25 am

Brian,

I love the site, here is my entry:

How to be Ultra Productive – Six Tips
http://www.salaryscout.com/blog/how-to-be-ultra-productive-six-tips/

Cheers,
Ben

71 Meredith March 8, 2007 at 8:50 am

Try this one:

How to Raise Money for Team in Training (or other favorite charities)

http://squidoo.com/tntfundraising

72 James Brown March 8, 2007 at 9:48 am

Have been looking forward to you doing this again – you should make it a regular thing!

Please consider this one:

http://www.rin.ac.uk/how-would-you-answer-these-easy-questions

73 Kevin Leonard March 8, 2007 at 9:48 am
74 Mark Goodyear March 8, 2007 at 9:52 am

Clearly, I’m a little late to this party, but here’s my submission:
“Pens Should Be Mightier Than Toilet Plungers.”

75 Mike March 8, 2007 at 10:07 am

I struggled to come up with a good title for this post since it is a pretty important post to me but couldn’t do it. I would love to change it to something better.

http://www.beagooddad.com/316/raising-children-with-or-without-autism/

76 Francisco H. Perez March 8, 2007 at 10:15 am

Thank you, I have always, suffered from reading and writing. This would be very beneficial for me.

http://www.fhpentertainment.com/blog/2006/12/21/caring-takes-time/

77 Lisa Gates March 8, 2007 at 10:25 am

Brian,
What a dangerous request for a busy man. I could submit my whole blog!

http://intrinsiclifedesign.squarespace.com/scaffolding/2007/3/1/who-says-youre-a-writer.html

78 Rob March 8, 2007 at 10:59 am
79 John Frost March 8, 2007 at 11:07 am

Great offer. Thank you. Please check out this post

Scary Sully: Pixar’s Monsters Inc recut into Horror film

http://www.thedisneyblog.com/tdb/2007/03/scary_sully_pix.html

80 TheAnand March 8, 2007 at 11:39 am

http://www.theanand.com/blog/index.php/life-living-it/airtel-2mbps-plans-warning/

I dugg this, but am not getting the response i need. . .maybe the headline is not quite right? It is about airtel, a telecom company and about their new 2 Mbps plans…

81 engtech March 8, 2007 at 11:42 am

Yay :) I love these series.

Here’s a few:

How to Earn a Six Figure Income from Blogging in Two Easy Steps
http://engtech.wordpress.com/2007/02/09/how-to-earn-a-six-figure-income-from-blogging-in-two-easy-steps/

You can be a good example or a horrible warning – How NOT to be a Successful Blogger
http://engtech.wordpress.com/2006/12/20/you-can-be-a-good-example-or-a-horrible-warning-how-not-to-be-a-successful-blogger/

How to use Facebook without Losing Your Job over it
http://engtech.wordpress.com/2007/03/08/how-to-use-facebook-without-losing-your-job-over-it/

The Missing Curriculum for Programmers and High Tech Workers
http://engtech.wordpress.com/2007/03/01/missing_programmer_curriculum/

What’s a URL to do? – How to Save URLs
http://engtech.wordpress.com/2007/02/28/how-to-save-urls/

82 Charles Schoenfeld March 8, 2007 at 11:45 am

Wanted to make this headlne more benefit-driven, but couldn’t figure out how to do it without losing the big picture:

“It’s official: The Writer’s Database upgrades to version 2.0!”

http://www.luminarypub.com/services/writersdb/blog/?p=8

Thanks for this offer!

83 The Reviewer March 8, 2007 at 11:48 am

http://the-reviewer.net/2007/03/06/the-prestige-movie-review/

Thank you. I guess I am a little late.

84 timjpriebe March 8, 2007 at 11:51 am
85 Cam Beck March 8, 2007 at 12:23 pm
86 mark alves March 8, 2007 at 12:24 pm

Brian,

Thank you for your generosity. Here’s a post for your consideration.
http://faithfulweb.wordpress.com/2007/03/05/40-ways-to-keep-readers-from-giving-up-your-site-for-lent/

87 Steve March 8, 2007 at 1:06 pm
88 Jacin March 8, 2007 at 1:42 pm

WOW! 88 requests already. You are in high demand. Can you even see me way down here? :-)

I wrote an article about knowing what we truly desire. I’d love to know how you would rewrite this title:

Do You Know What You Truly Desire?

Thanks, I appreciate your work.

89 Megan March 8, 2007 at 1:59 pm

I struggled with this one and wasn’t able to get it right:

http://www.meganmcdermott.com/2007/03/01/all-web-content-should-be-dated/

90 Andrew G.R. March 8, 2007 at 2:28 pm

Man, your blog makes me just want to hang my head in shame. I struggled with this one earlier today…

http://www.jobacle.com/blog/2007/3/8/12-steps-to-a-productive-driving-commute.html

Not the most original content on the planet…but a fresh spin on the headline could have made all the difference.

91 Jen March 8, 2007 at 3:11 pm

Big Fat Crafty Gal Needs Help Writing Headlines!

It’s true, all of it! I started a blog 3 weeks ago to review plus-size knitting, crochet and sewing patterns. People love it. But now my headlines are starting to look the same. How many times can I get away with “7 New Plus-Size Patterns at blahblah.com?”

I followed one of your formulas for my latest headline and have gotten the least traffic ever. I can only conclude that I seriously screwed up because you, of course, are brilliant.

“You Don’t Have to Be Skinny to Make Things from Knitty”

Pretty clunky, I know. It’s a big deal that knitty.com is now sizing up all of their patterns. How do I capture that in a headline?

http://www.bigcrafty.com/2007/03/08/you-dont-have-to-be-skinny-to-make-things-from-knitty/

Thanks for your great content and take care.

92 ilker March 8, 2007 at 3:46 pm

I’m sure I had one submitted in the first 10 comments.. no chance you deleted it, right Brian?

I don’t see a reason as to why you would anyway.. but here it is:

http://ilkeryoldas.blogspot.com/2006/12/microsoft-substitutes.html

93 Brian March 8, 2007 at 4:01 pm

Akismet is marking some of these submissions as spam… I’m trying to fish them out if possible, but I get a TON of spam comments, so some may slip by.

94 Chanpory March 8, 2007 at 4:11 pm

Hey Brian, how about this one. I just couldn’t get it right:

http://www.lifeclever.com/how-to-organize-your-cluttered-desktop-and-regain-your-sanity/

95 TheMadHat March 8, 2007 at 5:38 pm
96 Takashi Yamada March 8, 2007 at 7:43 pm
97 Julie March 8, 2007 at 10:28 pm

This is great! I would really appreciate help with this one:

http://truthcurve.wordpress.com/2007/03/08/how-to-eliminate-guilt-from-your-workday/

98 Jamie March 8, 2007 at 11:00 pm
99 Hummerbie March 9, 2007 at 3:17 am

Incredable…

You must be really overwhelmed by this response….

So I just add my case to this list.

http://blog.design-cars.com/working-your-images-into-search-engine-optimization/

Way to go Brain !

100 Jack Norell March 9, 2007 at 4:55 am

Great idea, but I may be late to the party:

http://www.eyeflare.com/article/2006/packing-travel/

101 bee March 9, 2007 at 9:07 am

hi brian,

i’ve just started an “about design blog”.
here’s one of my articles’ title:
photoshop is preparing for google supremacy

thanks for your help!

102 Ian March 9, 2007 at 1:42 pm

Hi Brian,

Would love your thoughts on a headline for this recurring feature:

http://praxistheatre.blogspot.com/2007/03/seen-any-good-theatre-lately.html

103 Nomadishere March 9, 2007 at 4:51 pm

Brian – I love your writing. I’m sure you get that a lot ;)

I just posted an article recently and would be seriously stoked if remixed the title.

http://nomadishere.com/2007/03/08/holistic-marketing-give-the-lady-what-she-wants-7-questions-to-ensure-your-business-succeeds/

104 Ponn Sabra March 10, 2007 at 12:17 pm
105 David Bradley March 10, 2007 at 1:31 pm
106 Michelle March 11, 2007 at 3:02 am
107 Brian March 11, 2007 at 4:28 pm

OK, time to close this out. Thanks for all the submissions!

108 angie September 24, 2007 at 3:38 pm

Thank you. I guess I am a little late. But it’s better late rather than nothing had to be done.

109 Lesley September 10, 2008 at 12:33 am

HI there
If this offer to help rewrite headliners is still open, I would surely be grateful. This is my first attempt at writing any type of press release at all so any comments you are able to make would be much appreciated
Kind regards
Lesley

110 bb September 29, 2008 at 12:53 am

I need help with my landing page and headlines. Any suggestions are welcome. http://www.landlordassociation.com

111 JW October 3, 2008 at 7:25 am

May just be “What The Doctor Ordered!”

112 LilaTovCocktail November 3, 2008 at 2:08 pm

Can’t decide between these two posts. I considered using a list headlines when I wrote both of these …

Homemade Obama signs & what they tell us about this election

Here’s why we still need feminism: Sarah Palin’s bizarre cultural cache

113 stuart raffeld August 24, 2009 at 4:05 pm

headline help!

114 Discount Kitchen Cabinets September 9, 2009 at 4:53 pm

I think I am late….this was a great offer…

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