Which Words Can You Live Without?

by Muhammad Saleem

Editing Your Writing

On November 19th, 1863, popular orator Edward Everett gave a two-hour speech that nobody remembers. Following Everett, President Abraham Lincoln stood up, delivered 269 words now known as the Gettysburg Address, and sat down. Lincoln’s two-minute speech is regarded as one of the greatest in American history.

Experts from Strunk and White to Stephen King agree:

Omit needless words.

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  • #1 Chris → 07.11.07 at 9:20 pm

    Interesting point. Abe Lincoln was famous for being right on the target, and I guess the American public was just tired of the Civil War, so he cut the speech short.

    This has inspired me to write a new topic at my forum http://www.nerdcouncil.com - I’ll make it as short as possible.

  • #2 GoingLikeSixty → 07.11.07 at 9:28 pm

    I used to avoid sentence fragments like the plague.
    That’s OK now. Thanks for the confidence boost.

  • #3 Laura → 07.11.07 at 9:30 pm

    This is so on target!! In fact, I posted on avoiding redundancy in writing yesterday.

    Of course, your post is shorter and more to the point. It’s probably also more memorable.

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  • #5 Hamlet Batista → 07.11.07 at 10:12 pm

    I was hoping to read more, but the fact that you made your point by writing less is remarkable.

  • #6 Sherwin → 07.11.07 at 11:46 pm

    Holistic. I hate that word! It’s a word politicians in my country use all the time. Every plan is a/an holistic plan.

    And no, it’s not that country. My sister is not #4 prostitute :D

  • #7 John → 07.12.07 at 12:14 am

    I agree. We don’t need redundant words. Be simple.

  • #8 Susie → 07.12.07 at 12:25 am

    I love the Gettysburg Address… it’s simple yet eloquent.. that reminds me.. when growing up, my dad used to liked to give us lectures that would last couple of hours. That was one of our punishments. I remember my leg falling asleep sometimes.. man did he like to talk.. but it was couple of sentences he said from time to time.. (not during lecture) that I remember the most.

  • #9 William Profet → 07.12.07 at 1:48 am

    Quality over quantity!

    The number of words doesn’t matter. The power, emotion and value they bring to the reader - that’s important.

    So, I agree - throw away needless words. :)

  • #10 Joanna Young → 07.12.07 at 1:49 am

    The other thing that’s interesting about the Address is the number of times that he used “here” (I think it’s 8). I wonder if some editors would have said that at least one of those uses was redundant? And yet it’s the repetition and emphasis of “here” that adds power to the speech.

    A neat reminder that it’s not just the number of words but how you use them.

    Joanna

  • #11 Matt → 07.12.07 at 3:50 am

    In 1773, Samuel Johnson advised writers to be harsh with their word count: “Read over your compositions,” he said, “and where ever you meet with a passage which you think is particularly fine, strike it out.” History shows the benefits of ruthless editing.

  • #12 Amrit Hallan → 07.12.07 at 4:56 am

    It all depends what you are trying to convey, but yes, especially when you are writing, and more specially when you are copywriting, needless words do more harm than good.

    In literature I’m quite flexible though. Sometimes when you read Dostoevsky or Dickens, you feel like they just go on and on. But I love these guys as writers.

  • #13 shane → 07.12.07 at 5:40 am

    HA!, I too was looking for the more link, then I clicked on the title thinking Opera was doing the nasty with me again. Ok Brian you’re a card !!! Umm is this a record for you? “the shortest post on copyblogger?”

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  • #15 Geoff → 07.12.07 at 6:31 am

    I’m sure the brevity of this post is intentional as well.

  • #16 Beth Cole → 07.12.07 at 6:51 am

    I couldn’t agree more. Brevity is courtesy!

  • #17 MisssyM → 07.12.07 at 8:06 am

    Wise words

  • #18 ShaneSw → 07.12.07 at 8:06 am

    Agreed.

  • #19 Brian Clark → 07.12.07 at 9:05 am

    OK everyone, I do admit to playing editor here. Muhammad wrote a nice longer article on brevity, and I said “We can’t write at length on brevity… it’s just not right!” :)

    Sometime in the near future we will publish the rest of the piece, because Mu had two techniques and some great examples on how to omit needless words.

  • #20 Roshawn → 07.12.07 at 10:59 am

    Like everyone else, I agree.

    However, I find it difficult to be brief when writing my novel. Oh well, I guess I’ll have a lot of rewriting to do.

  • #21 Ben Yoskovitz → 07.12.07 at 11:31 am

    I try and eliminate the phrase, “I think” when writing on my blog. It’s my blog, of course they’re my thoughts. You don’t really need to preface your own thoughts with the phrase, “I think.”

  • #22 redwall_hp → 07.12.07 at 11:55 am

    Jabberwocky.

  • #23 Adam Pieniazek → 07.12.07 at 12:41 pm

    You dissing my homeboy, Edward Everett (his house in Dorchester, Ma is seconds from mine)?

    Why dems fighting words good sir!

  • #24 F → 07.12.07 at 1:46 pm

    I totally agree. I grew up learining to write like that, so I was totally in my element - but later on in my school career my family moved and that school district was very into formulaic writing, and adding a lot of “BS” to papers. I had a very hard time learning how to add fluff to a paper, and even then I still ended up short! I had one teacher though that appreciated it a lot.

  • #25 Nick Bakewell → 07.12.07 at 1:48 pm

    Wow, funny - I just went to Gettysburg yesterday and heard about this, and now it’s a post! Haha…anyways, it is a great point. Rambling is bad. Ever notice how paragraphs in newspapers are only 2 to 3 sentences long? They’re straight and to the point, no frills. Keep the user’s attention.

  • #26 Dave Navarro → 07.12.07 at 3:33 pm

    Maybe it wasn’t the speech itself …

    … but the fact a politician gave a speech that short. Now that’s history-making. :-)

    Of course, words can save you too - Teddy Roosevelt was shot in the chest in 1912, but the manuscript for his upcoming speech deflected the bullet.

    http://www.historybuff.com/library/refteddy.html

    ’nuff said!

  • #27 legbamel → 07.12.07 at 3:49 pm

    Bring on the techniques! I think a lot of people, including me, could use some pointers.

  • #28 John Place → 07.12.07 at 4:28 pm

    Instead of omitting redunant words, I say omit them all! :)

    Let’s all stop reading and go jogging.

  • #29 Hafiz Rahman → 07.13.07 at 1:05 am

    @ legbamel : I think the title of this post is the short version of the technique.

    Just write and see if you can find words we can remove, sentences we can replace with shorter ones, and so on.

    I’m still learning this as well, so this post is a nice boost.

  • #30 Edward → 07.13.07 at 2:30 am

    I fully agree with your insightful perspective, actually there is a similar thread at Frontier Blog
    ( http://www.hwswworld.com/wp )

  • #31 Alfa → 07.13.07 at 12:31 pm

    Good editing, Brian. I’ll now be more careful with the many-ness of my words. :-D

  • #32 David Zemens → 07.13.07 at 10:32 pm

    The most difficult class I took in college was a freshman composition class. The purpose of the class was to teach the students to write concisely. It’s hard to be brief and choose the right words, and I had not been reminded about it for quite some time until reading this post. Now I am going to try and write much more succinctly in the future.

  • #33 Tips Of All Sorts → 07.14.07 at 6:36 am

    Don’t forget about numbering or the use of bullet points! Would you rather read a long paragraph or have it laid out in point form?

  • #34 Brian Clark → 07.14.07 at 6:41 am

    We certainly wouldn’t forget about that. :)

    But there is a fundamental difference between content structure and brevity. Writing list items and bullet points that communicate more with fewer words would be a combination of the two concepts.

  • #35 Lawton → 07.15.07 at 12:05 am

    Brevity, and the use of it, is paramount in writing great copy. This is what I’ve learned from this post and others like Joe Sugerman.

    It seems though, that are certain lines of copy essential and it’s hard for me to sometimes figure out, “hey, does this really need to go or can it stay?” Is it important enough?

    That’s where the rubber meets the road.

  • #36 Rob O. → 07.15.07 at 6:31 am

    Some of my favorite - and hopefully most effective - posts are those that I’ve rehashed over the course of multiple edits. I often compose blog posts off-line just so I’ll have the opportunity to review and distill the content down prior to pressing the “publish” button.

  • #37 Simon → 07.16.07 at 4:51 am

    I guess the art is to be simple and to the point, yet give enough detail to get the point across. I am a fan of lists in blog “articles” also!

  • #38 Ad Tracker → 07.17.07 at 3:36 pm

    I know and understand that short pithy posts are much more efficient but I always feel the need to explain everything and fill in the background information because I don’t want my readers to be confsed and take away the wrong impr …Oh, you know what I mean ;)

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  • #41 LaurenMarie → 07.18.07 at 2:56 pm

    Many of us had teachers in school that required a minimum essay length (5 pages, 40 pages, whatever). We learned to write superfluously to fill up those papers with empty words! Now you’re telling me I must unlearn what they taught me in school? ;)

  • #42 milenka → 07.19.07 at 7:20 am

    I agree. KISS (Keep It Short and Simple)

  • #43 Tai McQueen → 07.19.07 at 4:59 pm

    I’ve heard that the first draft of “The Old Man and the Sea” was over 400 pages. Brevity is the soul of a masterpiece.

  • #44 Krish Mandal → 10.10.07 at 2:50 pm

    in other words: eschew obfuscation?

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